Bitter friend, pour me the sound of mountains
climbing under the waves like spreading gills.
These fingers lift
To the ones left behind
To the ones silent
To the ones hunted and cradled
up and out of the grass green waters
in gentle nets: I say, you do not surprise me
knocking the waves and wood with sullen flank.
You are not unfamiliar, in your blue slip,
in this dust of droplets, salting
first the dry dock, then the ice.
When the kettle explodes into shrill white steam, I will not be there.
When you look up,
the cup will not
be in my hand, the swirling teaspoon
not in my other.
The world will shatter, without me,
on the edge of a machine recording.
I will be your dial tone.
Crit Ticks for the Critics by nycterent, literature
Literature
Crit Ticks for the Critics
"He has the right to criticize who has the heart to help." - Abraham Lincoln
Introduction:
You've read guides, you've heard the propaganda, and now there's no going back. You've decided: "I want to write critiques too!"
Looking out over the gray expanse of dA, you spot a poem. Or a photograph. Or a juicy piece of digital art, and you know exactly what you want to say. Or maybe you don't, but you slog through, making the effort. And voila! A click and you navigate away, grinning, imagining the artist's delight when the deviant opens his or her message center upon the next log-in.
You left a critique, whether as a "critique" or in a comment