This is an ode to plastic bottles swelling with ice,
skies pressed apart by white foam, and steam
gleaming where there used to be blue arches
starched across the daytime steeples. This
is an ode to rain forests and cassette tapes
draped in black tangles over green like roads,
exploding their winding way from civilization.















Critiques
Usually the title is placed as an afterthought in most poetry, but yours seemed like a lot of thought went into making sure the title was as important as the poem itself.
The juxtaposition of man made entities against nature to create imagery really stood out to me in this poem.
Particularly the image of "...rain forests and cassette tapes draped in black tangles over green like roads..." To me it is a very powerful image that will probably never leave me due to it's memorability.
The break between the end of the fourth line, "This" and the beginning of the fifth line "is an ode..." sort of threw me off a bit.
I understand that you're starting a new idea by breaking it off into a new stanza, but I feel that this would have been better achieved if the "This" had been carried down to the fifth line to make it flow better.
Aside from that I feel that it is a wonderful poem and that you have a fabulous talent for creating powerful imagery in the minds of your readers.
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