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Unfinal Solution
Jim and Dave shuffled down the street in the hot summer sun.  Occasionally they would encounter an obstacle, such as a shopping cart, corpse, pile of trash, or burned out car. Depending on the size and nature of the obstacle, their zombie intellect would kick over into high gear, and a conversation such as this might ensue:
“Rains!  Rains!  Raaaaaaaains1….”
If the object was large, such as a chunk of flaming airplane wreckage, Jim and Dave would do the Zombie Shuffle around its perimeter, sometimes bumping into each other and the obstacle itself.  On rare occasions, the not-quite-cooperative maneuvering deflected them from their original direction of movement, which was entirely random anyway.
If the obstacle was small or spread out (like the 2000 individually-wrapped packages of toilet paper they’d encountered yesterday, rolling and skittering before their tattered
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happily never ending
Just so you know - I am happy. I am placing
my chin over your heart and smiling. I am
finally budding reverie in this thing and its only adjective
is indescribable. I think I’m finally going to join the chorus,
highlight and scribble on a classic book’s pages, tear off
these itchy barriers and lie down with
you bare
your souls like frog spleens, though you do not know
what frog spleens are made of and often forget the rest
of the important facts. This is okay, this is alright. I begin
understanding that I am the teacher, as well as the pupil
and you are the teacher, as well as the pupil and my pupils dilate
under harsh lights, but this is okay, this is alright because
in this very second, someone is learning to fly and then spiraling
down like two birds in sacred dance, and these are the things
that make me so happy; much like warm rain, warm strays,
and dangerous beauty. Yes, I want you to know that I am happy
with these restless eyes – these restless hands, these restl
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Her Anger
Waves barely show
in deep water, even at the surface,
but fish somehow feel surges
pass along their lateral lines,
and flash silver away.
Commenting is unwise.
Light moves differently
in water than in air.
Its passage is sluggish,
and it changes its angle.
Waves grow taller
in shallow water, until
they break, buckling
at the center and collapsing
in a roar of white foam
and black depth until smashed flat
against the sand, energy dispelled.
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Dirty Feet
The day breaks, into shards of sky,
and half awake I swear you've sprouted sheets within your very soul;
an extension on your limbs and light so dim grows golden in the
shattered sun while you recollect the day I was afraid of birds.
You pressed your arms so tightly to your side until the fear,
irrational, of flapping wings,
could lovingly subside.
Your body bent, and sterling silver,
is a picture frame that's sent to dazzle us with blinding repurcussions.
My dirty feet endure your scorn, demure
I sit cross legged and wonder at the clutter in this room.
Cluttered thoughts are cluttered floors,
but you don't mind
and lazily refuse to do your share of chores.
My dirty feet endure your scorn.
Two hundred forty three; cooling count
from when I stir you with a cup of tea.
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Random from Resources

The Trouble with a Love Poem
Ever since that first cave man told the woman of his fancy, "Looking at you makes me want to say something where all the words end with the same sound," and then clubbed her and dragged her off to his cave to show her his etchings, most people's first poetic efforts have been expressions of fondness and desire.
And no matter how bad the poem is, when the feeling is mutual, the response is going to be very reinforcing. "You wrote me a POEM?! Oh, it's BEAUTIFUL! That's so SWEET!" Et cetera, et cetera, with kisses.
At this point, the love poem is perfect. It communicated the desired message, and it had the desired effect. But then, with the beloved's ecstatic acclamations ringing in his ears, our fledgling poet takes the next logical step in his literary career: he joins deviantART and uploads.
Back in the good old days, when we had to walk 5 miles uphill through the snow to get to the Internet, (borrowed that line from Zits), young lovers only inflicted such embarrassments on their frien
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Tips For Editing Poetry
***Tips For the Novice (and otherwise) - Editing***
The blanket statement, "Editing/revision harms poetry," is simply wrong.  It's akin to a photographer claiming that focusing the lens ruins the emotion of the photograph.  It is the details, and the appropriate attention paid to them, that separate a photograph from a snapshot.  Imagine a film maker slapping every frame he shot up on the screen without editing for continuity, for pacing, for effect.  What a disaster.  That is not to say that editing can't be destructive - there is such a thing as poor editing, just as there is poor writing.  But done correctly, done well, it is one of the most important tools in the poet's shed.
Never shy away from editing/revision.  Some young writers feel that to revise is to kill the spirit of the poem.  This notion serves to sacrifice the potential of a poem for an ideal that
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Taking a Critique :iconliiga:liiga 244 64
The Art of Refining Prose
The Art of Refining Prose
Many writers dread the editing process. Not only does it delay the showcase of prose, it can seem a tedious and painstaking task. Often, editing is more time-consuming than the initial writing and consequently, it is either ignored altogether or briefly indulged. This is a great shame. Sincere editing not only proves a pleasurable experience but invaluable to prose, as this is a wonderful opportunity to buff, polish and tighten the impact of one's writing.
Some might argue that editing is not only unnecessary, but detrimental to the “raw concept” of one’s inspiration. The answer to this is simple: select a prose that hasn’t been edited and compare against one that has. It’s soon evident that a well-edited piece is not only easier to read, but communicates the author’s ideas with greater clarity. Few Bestsellers hit the shelves having skipped the editing office. And unless the author has behind them years upon years of writi
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How to Accept A Critique
First, there's a common misconception that I want to address before I even begin.  I've heard way too many people try to claim that they don't write for an audience or that they only write for themselves.  In my mind, this usually translates to something like, "You or someone else gave me a critique I don't agree with, so I'm trying to justify why I'm going to ignore it."  You're going to have a hard time convincing me that you don't care about anyone else's opinion of your work if you PUBLICALLY SUBMIT IT ONLINE.
I don't know if you've noticed, but dA (and any other site like it) is essentially structured to be used for peer review.  That's the main point of the ability to leave comments in the first place.  If you're really only writing for yourself, you would keep your stories in a shoe-box hidden under your bed.  And, no, the "I was posting it so my very bestest friend Mary Sue could read it" excuse doesn't fly either.
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The Writing Process
What is the Writing Process?
Many of us learned that the writing process is made up of five parts: Pre-writing, Writing, Revision, Editing, and Publishing.  Indeed, this process has been so ingrained, and the vocabulary and terms have become such a part of our education, that some students (and adults) feel as if writing is a formulaic, rigid thing—not unlike learning mathematics—that they simply never excelled in.  Fortunately, this simply isn't true.  While the five basic steps of the writing process are effective, they can only be effective if the people using the process understand the purpose of each step.
Experience has shown that many students do not know the purpose of drafting beyond a certain, vague understanding that you're supposed to "correct" or "fix" something for each new draft.  It’s unfortunate, but it’s also been shown that students who are forced to Pre-Write in certain ways, even when they have been
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Write Better: Read More
We didn't believe it, either, but you really can learn a lot from reading a book!  If you've ever wanted some worthwhile advice from someone other than your high school English teacher, this is the place to look.  The authors below are experts in their fields, well-respected and admired by accomplished writers from all over the world, and we're bringing you a list of their most prized and collectively-effective books.  (Tried-and-tested by our worthy administrators, no less!)
So what're you waiting for?  Learn how to make every word count!
Reading Resource List for the Aspiring Writer
General Prose:
Writing Reminders: Tools, Tips, and Techniques  (Jim Burke)
Writing Tools: 50 Essential Strategies for Every Writer  (Roy Peter Clark)
Writing without Teachers  (Peter Elbow)
Writing With Power: Techniques for Mastering the Writing Process  (Peter Elbow)
On Writing
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Active and Passive Voice
Active Voice
Active voice occurs when the subject or agent in the sentence performs the action, often towards an object. For example, let's look at the following sentence written in active voice:
Katie spilled the milk.
In this sentence, Katie is the subject, and she performs the action (spilling) on the direct object (the milk.) The most obvious way to spot active voice is through the use of active verbs, which are simply verbs that express actions. In most cases, the sentence will take on the simple form of the tense it's in, whether past, present, or future.
Passive Voice
In passive voice, the object being acted upon is emphasized over the agent. A passive version of the previous sentence would look like this:
The milk was spilled by Katie.
In this sentence, our object (the milk) appears before the action (was spilled) and the agent (Katie.) You will also notice that this sentence is in the progressive fo
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Showing, Part One
If you've ever taken a class in creative writing, you've no doubt heard the teacher repeat the phrase, "Show, don't tell" over and over again.  While there are few hardest rules in creative writing, this persistent little mantra might be the ultimate.  Teachers and writers who write about writing spout it out all the time, but what does it mean anyway?  After, isn't all writing really "telling" on some level?
It's best to view "showing" not as a single technique, but a summation of the most effective writing techniques.  If we know anything about poetry, it's that the best poetry usually conjures specific and concrete images.  Beyond language itself, images are the meat and bones of poetry.  So goes most of prose as well.  The prose writer has the added duty of creating situations and characters that seem real and believable.
Showing invites the reader into the world of out poem and story.  If the reader can see, smell, taste, and feel the world through our writing, the reader is more
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Editorial - Cliche
Cli·ché (klee-shay) also cliche (kl-sh)  n.
1.) A trite or overused expression or idea: ?Even while the phrase was degenerating to cliché in ordinary public use... scholars were giving it increasing attention? (Anthony Brandt).
2.) A person or character whose behavior is predictable or superficial: ?There is a young explorer... who turns out not to be quite the cliche expected? (John Crowley).
(source: )
It's not something pleasant to hear, or pleasant to say.
  But what's to be done, when you find it one day
   in a pile of mismatched lines like a stack of hay?
  They aren't hard to spot, like white backgrounds
   and black dots. You'll know what I mean, in
  a minute or two, but cliché phrases and ideas
will be the death of you.
What does a word or phrase need to do in order to become cliché?
There is no patented test that words must go through nor a physical examinat
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Lesson 2 - More Meter
"A poet who makes use of a worse word instead of a better, because the former fits the rhyme or the measure, though it weakens the sense, is like a jeweler, who cuts a diamond into a brilliant, and diminishes the weight to make it shine more."
  - Horace Walpole
While every metrical poem will have a base meter to serve as its backbone, many poets often find that writing in ten-syllable iambic sentences, for example, is too limiting for their purposes, either because pure meter doesn't provide enough variation for proper emphasis or because it quickly gets dull and tedious, or a combination of the two.
You might have noticed this limitation when you wrote your blank verse in the last lesson.  Often it occurs that there is something you want to say that simply will not work in your base meter, that you have to sound like Yoda to get your words into the proper meter, or that you feel that a different foot "feels right" in a certain place. &
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Handout 1 - More on Scansion
More on Scansion
If scanning a line of verse is difficult for you, do not fret.  As the cliché goes, practice makes perfect.  In this lesson, I'll go over some of the tricks of scansion and offer some ways to more easily identify a line's meter.
Take this opening line of one of Shakespeare's most famous sonnets, titled either "Sonnet 18" or by the first line:
Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Your first task should be to identify polysyllabic words that can only be pronounced in one way.  "Compare" and "summer's" are two such words, an iamb and a trochee, respectively:
         ˘  /              /  ˘
Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Saying "COMpare" or "sumMER'S" would sound awkward, as this is not how they are pronounced in normal speech.  We have another hint in "a," which is part o
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Lesson 1 - Basics of Meter
"Life is tons of discipline.  Your first discipline is your vocabulary; then your grammar and your punctuation.  Then, in your exuberance and bounding energy you say you're going to add to that.  Then you add rhyme and meter.  And your delight is in that power."
  - Robert Frost
As Robert Frost is saying, meter and rhyme are not the most important parts of writing.  They are the most intricate when creating poetry, but poems can be written without them.  I began my poetry with free verse, and gradually became more and more fixed as I went on to learn more about how meter affects the poem, and how rhyme, alliteration, assonance, and the like also affect the reader's experience with a piece of poetry.  And my free verse is all the better for it.  Even if you never write another fixed poem after finishing this course, an intricate understanding of the rules of conventional poe
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Critical Acclaim & Testimonials

"She proposed in the most beautiful way, under a starlit sky full of rainbows and flying unicorns. She promised to love me forever. Then she dumped me for a cat."
"In an instant, she collapsed our universe into a singularity. Yet, nobody noticed because it was immediately replaced by a duplicate universe. Everything is exactly the same...well...except that the color Turbopple no longer exists." - vest
"She cloned me. Now Winewriter2 and I can't figure out which one of us is the original. We've decided to split everything in half. My cat has not survived the ordeal."
- WineWriter
"She preserved me for the winter. I now live in a series of 25 alphabetically-arranged jars in her basement. She's using the twenty-sixth to spread upon her toast, but I refuse to discuss which letter it was." - memnalar
"She sealed me in a box with a subatomtic particle in an attempt to explain Schrodinger's theory of putative incompleteness of quantum mechanics. I still don't understand and am now not sure whether I am living or dead.

"Why did you do that?

"Am I a zombie?" - Paperdaisies




Hi *THEendOmega, I'm going to start with a rundown of the overall summary of the poem's message. That way, you'll see what I'm reading ...

Hi *Catspupil, I'm going to take you at your word just dive straight into my impressions and see where that gets me. Intent:Title: The ...

I am a critic. Hear me rawr.

Obligatory crit disclaimer.

Ten years, and a couple cute dogs

Journal Entry: Fri Jun 27, 2014, 1:16 PM
Earlier this week, I realized it's been over a decade that I've been a member of deviantART. Wow. Ten years this may, from poetry to photography to prose to more photography to digital art. It's pretty intense, but the biggest thing that hit me when I logged into this account after this long hiatus was the reminder of all the wonderful people I've met along the way.

If you'd like to keep in touch, and I hope you do, you should watch me over at ninebark. We will chat and note and comment and have an amazing time. And if that's not enough, let me bribe you with some pretty pictures:

Caira by ninebark   Rose by ninebark   From Beneath by ninebark   Woman in Pink by ninebark

Come say hello and tell me what you've been up to,



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"I gave up on new poetry myself thirty years ago, when most of it began to read like coded messages passing between lonely aliens on a hostile world."
          Russell Baker

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